User blog comment:Krayfish/Dark Prophecy Updates/@comment-771241-20120822015538/@comment-1743498-20120822020340

Well, before you fix the stories, I would suggest working on the background lore some more. It will be much easier to address the issues at hand from there:


 * I would like to see more elaboration on Delson government. How do they manage to unify the whole culture?  Could there possibly be some dark secrets about it?  Either that or have multiple Delson cultures.  I just find it unlikely that every single Delson supports the government even after they were saved by another species.


 * For Ashadra, it's extremely unlikely that humans will evolve to be exactly like their Earth counterparts. Think of identical twins being separated at birth - they would need to adapt to their new environment to survive.  I would suggest creating some more history.


 * Did the Tokarthi really have to move an entire continent, or could they have just abducted a few humans and introduced them to Ashadra? Lemuria was roughly 15,000 square miles.