Thread:Krayfish/@comment-4730598-20130120030637/@comment-4730598-20130120170506

Thanks.

The stroy has yet to be completed, so that's why it feels a little abrupt. I've also been getting some advice from my mom(a journalist major) about this whole showing/telling distinction. What kind of details are you thinking? I feel as though I've added enough, thogh that could easily be author's blindness.