Board Thread:New on Galactic Crucibles/@comment-5135903-20141008164704/@comment-5870856-20141009181212

I meant in the context of... well, the Khoikapek. I think you answered the question in saying what you're changing (essentially, they're the Khoikapek still, not... well, ammonium-breathing silicon-based cyborg space pirate ninja zombie spider giants) and I like what you're doing with them. It's an interesting idea, though I'm gonna miss the wings. I like wings :(

I like what you've got so far, I think it could make a good opening to the chapter. It doesn't need to be a prologue or anything, it's fine the way it is.