User blog comment:Krayfish/Dark Prophecy Updates/@comment-796766-20120822021455/@comment-1743498-20120822022210

The Karnas section seems fine for now, but the main critique I have is regarding how the story is centered. You probably might be against this, but I personally think the story should focus a bit more on Etah's side rather than Ahrganot. Out of all the characters, he fits the most traits of the Hero character, the main protagonist. Of course, I'm not saying the other GSSOC members are minor characters, but here's how I view them:

Etah - Hero Leader

Tholker - Casual Gunslinger

Ahrganot - Mysterious Inflitrator

Delson - Noble Warrior

Galiana - Aspiring Fighter

Also, I feel there should be a bit more build up to Etah's and Renr's rivalry. More mentions of it should occur throughout the entire story arc, much in the same way the tension towards Infra was built.