Board Thread:General Discussion/@comment-3582436-20140228122623/@comment-1743498-20140228150407

Not bad, but here's my two cents:
 * Is this supposed to be set in the modern day? I'm sure that Poe would not know what the "glowing Earth from orbit" would look.
 * It seems to be more of a real-life recounting of a tragic accident rather than a horror story. I don't know what the requirements are for this, but maybe a few romanticized or supernatural elements might make it more Poe-esque in my opinion.
 * Maybe some areas could be reworded to improve the pacing. It's hard to pinpoint where exactly something like that would be changed, but I would try reading it aloud a few times.