Story talk:Operation Money Cushion

List of changes
Here's the alterations I made to the story:
 * Significant dialogue rework and updated diction all around.
 * Made the terrorists a sect of the Hashaeons to connect the overall story.
 * Added new scenes and dialogue with Galiana making her presence on the team more visible.
 * Shortened the Umbra giving out personal insults monologue. Took his character in a different direction.
 * Changed and expanded the ending. Altered the nature of the incident of Etah choking him out.  Less of a lecture and more of a "snap out of it".  Ahrganot asks for leave to deal with his brother rather than marooning himself.

Krayfish (talk) 04:35, December 30, 2015 (UTC)