Thread:Krayfish/@comment-5135903-20141108141007/@comment-5870856-20141205031836

That was awesome! However, there wasn't really much of a climax. The ending seemed a little abrupt. I think it would've been best if they came back to the ship to find the Goblin's henchmen had captured it and were threatening Zanio's life. Then, there's a tense negotiation and they give the Goblin the info. In return, he pays them and lets them go.

Of course, it could be that Hanvel gives up the chance to get rich in exchange for saving Zanio's life and playing a part in the coming revolution. Regardless, there needs to be a climax of some sort.