Thread:Krayfish/@comment-771241-20120330162439/@comment-771241-20120331052918

I think I know how I'm going to write the scene of the final battle between Y'knahn and Sol I Dor, starting from the point when Sol I Dor gets up when he should have been defeated, to just after Y'knahn disappears after dying. Here's the prototype. It's merely the Transformers Cybertron scene adapted to replace Optimus Prime with Sol I Dor and Galvatron with Y'knahn. I'm open to improvement ideas, but also tell me what you think of what's here:

''Y'knahn looked back, almost certain he'd see a slaughtered Delson behind him. However, to his shock and horror, Sol I Dor still stood, even with the massive tear in his left wing, and his headdress knocked out of place, revealing one dead, useless eye. "What?!" the Hive Master shouted, "What trickery is this?"

Sol I Dor stood, and, with a flash appearing in his useless eye, responded, "No trickery, just your downfall!" And, from his sack, he revealed...the Blade of Rolalda, its blade now glowing teal blue, charged with Sol I Dor's overflowing Psionic Power. "Time to meet your fate, Y'knahn!"

Ahrganot recognized the blade, and realized who had restored it's power. "Krayhan..." he muttered to himself, realizing that the restoration and empowerment of Sol I Dor for this fight must be the deity of the Dhragolon working through Sol to help keep the balance, by destroying this source of Chaos.

Sol I Dor shouted boldly at Y'knahn, "I'll give you one last chance to surrender!"

"You are pathetic to the end," Y'knahn responded, as he charged, his blades of pure chaos aimed right at Sol I Dor.

"Very well," Sol I Dor responded casually, "Then this shall be YOUR END!" He swung the powerful blade at the Harvester, and the force of power eminating from both Sol I Dor and the Blade of Rolalda was enough to push Y'knahn backwards.

"Ah! Such...power!" Y'knahn cried as he was pushed back. When he came to a halt finally, he knelt down, trying to recover.

Sol I Dor then announced, boldly, "You will always lose, Y'knahn! You think of nothing but destruction! None of your victories last! You care about nothing but yourself! No one cares about you!" Sol I Dor then thrust his head forward, his eyes flashing again, with righteous fury. "NoThe time has come to end your struggle!"

Y'knahn got up again, and responded, "You're right, old friend. We've waged this war for FAR too long!" He then charged up energy, a purple shroud of it surrounding him.

Sol I Dor too began charging energy, teal and gold surrounding him, as the power of the Blade of Rolalda mixed with his Psionic Energies and supercharged him. "Only one shall stand Y'knahn! IT ends HERE!"

"NEVER!"

Y'knahn launched himself at Sol I Dor, while the latter launched himself at the former. The 2 charged across the open space, nothing more than the energies they now control propelling them. When they were close, Y'knahn slashed downwards with his blades of chaos. However, when the Blade of Rolalda struck the Chaos Energy Blades, they shattered...and pierced the Empowered Harvester. Y'knahn howled as his body was pierced by the blade, fragments of his body flying off. One fragment struck Sol I Dor in the headdress, and a moment later, a chunk of thhe headdress shattered. Then, the 2 were engulfed in a massive explosion, which consumed the combatants.

No longer seeing Sol I Dor, Galiana cried, "DAD!" as the other GSSOC Members called out, "SOL I DOR!"

The dust stayed up for several moment, before, finally, the dust settled...both Sol I Dor and Y'knahn remained...the latter with the Blade of Rolalda run through him. Sol I Dor straightened himself, his headdress half-destroyed, revealing his useless, dead eyes, now consumed by glowing energy.

Y'knahn looked up, slowly, and, as slowly, tried to punch Sol I Dor. As he did so, he said, "I...still live...You...haven't....won...not while my...soul...still burns..." Then, the Harvester laughed to himself, as flakes of his body floated away.

Sol I Dor then said, "You fought well. Good bye, Y'knahn."

The Harvester mouthed something...then, Y'knahn dissipated, now no more than dust in the wind. Sol I Dor then collapsed, only able to catch himself with his hands.

"Sol I Dor!" Ahrganot called to him, and the team rushed over to him.

Sol I Dor's expression changed to a Delson smile, and he said, "Don't worry, he won't get rid of me that easilly..."''

So, thoughts? If anything, how well did I copy that TC Scene(But thoughts on this scene would be nice).