Thread:Nra 'Vadumee/@comment-5459707-20120830052603/@comment-796766-20120830111511

You'll soon see why a number of new users like Kray and not me:

1) The universe has no edge.

2) Modern and ancient Earth have the same gravity.

3) This pitch is too narrative; It is more suited to use in the start of a story than an actual writing pitch.

4) More details. I have to strike 'Space People' down, make it creative; Why do they come to colonize the planet, but attack the indigenous, non-sapient lifeforms? Who are these 'wild gods'? Don't be secretive and dramatic on a pitch; The idea is so that there are no secrets or misunderstandings. In addition, why did these invaders come? Were they refugees? Colonists?

5) This kind of set up will prevent you from getting very far in the hierarchy. We need to be able to work your work into our canon for you to be a major author. If you have no intent of that, by all means. But this set up is unlike what we usually do, and that may be good, but it may also be bad.

Also, we'll be talking science later. I cannot finish my critique right now, I've somewhere to be.