Thread:Krayfish/@comment-771241-20120503045137

Ok, I'm sending this spoiler for A Stranger in a Strange Land, so that way, 1: I can have your insight onto to what would need to be fixed, and 2: I just feel the need to type it down. So, here it comes:

Sol I Dor watched as the 2 Dark-Aura-Shrouded Humans approached Galiana, their small squad of Harvester Drones. With that, he remembered the scene from when he first saw Galiana, with the Harvester attempting to 'harvest' her...and his anger grew to the boiling point.

With a roar, he charged Galiana's assailants. The Humans noticed him and the dark-skinned one ordered the Harvester Drones to charge. His predator prowess fueling his charge, Sol I Dor slammed into the Drone squad full force. He waded through, smashing some drones with his Flail-Tail, while he sliced others with his Arm-Blades.

Finally, after Sol I Dor made it through, the lighter-skinned Human Assailant shoved his darker-skinned companion away, and fired a Dark Aura burst at Sol I Dor, who rolled and dodged the attack. Infusing his claws with Psionic Energy, he swiped at the Human...and tore a chunk of its torso off.

Sol I Dor warned Galiana, "Look away..." He then grabbed the Light-Sinned Human Assailant and, slamming it to the ground, proclaimed, "You. Die!" Then, infusing his claws with Psionic Energy, he pierced the human's neck, grabbed his spine, and pulled with all his might. Then, with one heave, he tore the human's spine clean out, killing it.

The darker-skinned human lunged at Sol I Dor, who just blasted it away with a Psionic Blast. (More coming soon)

Just tell me if this scene needs to be fixed before I reach it (Still have a ways to go, I just wanted to get this typed down so I don't forget it). 